The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the manufacturing
process
of sugar
cane
in producing sugar
.
Overall
, there are seven stages of the production process
from planting the sugar
cane
to the drying and cooling process
of the sugar
before it can be consumed.
At the beginning of the process
, sugar
cane
is planted and it will be letting them grow for 12 to 18 months. Next,
the harvesting process
of sugar
cane
with two options harvesting by traditional way or modern way using a machine. Then
, the sugar
cane
is crushed to become juice before the juice is purified by a limestone filter.
Moving on to the next stage, before the juice turns into syrup, it experiences the evaporation process
using a heating method by the fire below the evaporator. Furthermore
, the next stage is separating sugar
crystals from syrup using a centrifuge machine. Finally
, before sugar
can be consumed and distributed to consumers, the sugar
is dried and cooled, and placed in the tubular big can.Submitted by zakiyaartanti19 on
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