Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their homes than rent them. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the
publict
Correct your spelling
public
think
that it is better to buy their homes than Correct subject-verb agreement
thinks
rent
them. I totally disagree with this
opinion because people
can slight
their Verb problem
save
money
and move to another house
. The main reason is that people
have a chance to reduce risk
of financial problems. It is slight Correct article usage
the risk
a
Remove the article
apply
money
because in today's world
the average number person can not Add a comma
world,
allow to
buy a Verb problem
apply
house
. However
, in the past over the
half of the population had Correct article usage
apply
a
Remove the article
apply
money
to buy a house
but now time
has changed. Add an article
the time
For instance
, the population of the USA always rent
a house
although
they have a high salary to purchase a house
, therefore
they slight their Rephrase
apply
money
over years
. Correct article usage
the years
Resent
research found that, namely 60 % of Correct your spelling
Recent
people
who slighted their money
became rich and independent. As a result
, if people
slight their money
, they will have a great financial position which can impacted
on their future Change the verb form
impact
be impacted
generation
. Another is that they can move from one to another Fix the agreement mistake
generations
house
which people
who buy the house
can not perform. Because people
rent
their houses
but not buy
. Correct pronoun usage
buy them
As a result
, they can leave to
Change preposition
for
better
Add an article
the better
a better
house
with more furniture and splendid design. A primary example of this
is public
from China, where they have a wide range of Correct article usage
the public
houses
and flat
with great Fix the agreement mistake
flats
interier
and Correct your spelling
interiors
design
. Fix the agreement mistake
designs
Therefore
, they can rent
it to not high
cost and live or not Correct article usage
a high
depends
on their desire. Wrong verb form
depending
However
, not only people
can move to another house
, but they also
expand their outlook because when they change their houses
it improve
their ability to recognise Change the verb form
improves
quality
of Add an article
the quality
houses
. As a result
, they might be more confident and responsible. In conclusion, over 80 % of the population of the world still renting
Wrong verb form
rent
houses
instead
of buying. Therefore
, aReplace the word
rented
rent
house
might be a great choice for all people
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