Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their homes than rent them. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the
publict
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public
think
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that it is better to buy their homes than
rent
them. I totally disagree with
this
opinion because
people
can
slight
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save
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their
money
and move to another
house
. The main reason is that
people
have a chance to reduce
risk
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the risk
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of financial problems. It is slight
a
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money
because in today's
world
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world,
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the average number person can not
allow to
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buy a
house
.
However
, in the past over
the
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apply
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half of the population had
a
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money
to buy a
house
but now
time
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the time
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has changed.
For instance
, the population of the USA always
rent
a
house
although
they have a high salary to purchase a
house
,
therefore
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they slight their
money
over
years
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the years
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.
Resent
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Recent
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research found that, namely 60 % of
people
who slighted their
money
became rich and independent.
As a result
, if
people
slight their
money
, they will have a great financial position which can
impacted
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impact
be impacted
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on their future
generation
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generations
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. Another is that they can move from one to another
house
which
people
who buy the
house
can not perform. Because
people
rent
their
houses
but not
buy
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buy them
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.
As a result
, they can leave
to
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for
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better
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the better
a better
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house
with more furniture and splendid design. A primary example of
this
is
public
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the public
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from China, where they have a wide range of
houses
and
flat
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flats
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with great
interier
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interiors
and
design
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designs
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.
Therefore
, they can
rent
it to not
high
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a high
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cost and live or not
depends
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depending
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on their desire.
However
, not only
people
can move to another
house
, but they
also
expand their outlook because when they change their
houses
it
improve
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improves
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their ability to recognise
quality
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the quality
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of
houses
.
As a result
, they might be more confident and responsible. In conclusion, over 80 % of the population of the world still
renting
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rent
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houses
instead
of buying.
Therefore
, a
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rented
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rent
house
might be a great choice for all
people
.
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