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The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
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The map details plans for the future development of the Norbiton industrial
area
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the number of roads will expand and factories will be replaced by housing. There will be additional places including shops, a medical centre, a playground and a school.The location of
this
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area
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 will remain the same which is east of the town and south of the farmland and river. There is a plan to construct more roads that will connect to additional housing.
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, the future plan projects will construct the road and bridge crossing the river in order to expand the housing
area
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 to the farmland. All of the factory will be turned into a living
area
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 and public space. The school will be erected in the east of the site. The playground will be constructed between the houses.
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, a second roundabout will be located in the south of the development
area
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 .Shops and the medical centre will be located at each corner of the roundabout.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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