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Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #county #environment
A true definition of a victorious nation is economically rich and very tidy surroundings. It is often argued that a
country
 cannot succeed in both, but some masses believe that it is certainly possible. I strongly agree with the statement that the
country
 could be financially and environmentally successful.
To begin
 with, if a
country
 is financially viable, the government will spend money on the
country
's attractions, so that, they can attract more tourists or visitors towards it. By doing so, the
country
's funds will go up with
increasing
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an increasing
the increasing
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 number of visitors
in
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 the
country
.
Hence
, it is proved that both the terms are
inter-linked
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 with each other.
On the contrary
, people believe that the financial growth of the
country
 is dependent on the industrial sector.
Growing
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A growing
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 number of factories have
great
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a great
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 impact on the environment. Government agencies are using forest land to build more and more factories.
Moreover
, waste from factories
also
polluting
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 water and land, which is affecting human health as well. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should plan
accordingly
 to manage both factors. They should launch good
scemes
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schemes
scenes
 so that
environment
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the environment
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 doesn't
effects
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have effects
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.
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