The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.
The line graph depicts the gross domestic product (
GDP
) of four countries, including Bangladesh, Pakistan, Nepal, and
Malaysia
, from 2010 to 2015 in billions of US
dollars
.
Overall
, the gross domestic product of the four countries stayed nearly constant over time. Nepal,
on the other hand
, had the most stagnant trend of all nations,
while
Malaysia
was the only country to decrease towards the end of the period.
Malaysia
saw consistent growth from 2010 to 2014, with values ranging from 260
billion
to 320
billion
dollars
, before dropping somewhat in 2015 to around 300
billion
dollars
. Despite
this
drop,
Malaysia
remained
first,
with the largest
GDP
of the three other countries. Nepal,
on the other hand
, remained the
last
runner, with over a
billion
dollars
in 2010 and slightly more than 1.5
billion
dollars
in 2015.
In contrast
, Bangladesh and Pakistan have had relative growth over the years. To illustrate, Bangladesh came in second with roughly 190
billion
dollars
in
GDP
in 2010, and reached a peak of over 290
billion
in 2015, nearly topping 
Malaysia
.
Finally
, Pakistan followed a similar path, with a
GDP
of around 110
billion
dollars
at the start of the year,
then
steadily increased to just under 200
billion
dollars
, despite the minor decrease in 2012.
Submitted by mjdf0930 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, malaysia, dollars, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
What to do next:
Look at other essays: