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The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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The given chart shows the trend of overseas
student
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 who
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 from universities in 6 different provinces in Canada from 2001 to 2006.
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, all provinces experienced
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 increase in 2006 unless Alberta
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 the least.
According to
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 the data, in 2006 New Brunswick was the highest proportion
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 for almost 12 % and it was the same for 2001 somewhere in the vicinity of 7 %. Afterward, Nova Scotia and British Colombia
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shared
similar
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 number
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 about 11 %, as
the
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Manitoba, Newfoundland &
Labrador
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and Labrador
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 by 7 % respectively.
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, the trend for Quebec was about 9%, followed by Ontario which
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 6%;
however
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, the number of graduated students in Alberta
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 merely under 5 %.
On the other hand
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, in 2001 New Brunswick, Nova Scotia and Quebec
they
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shared almost similar
number
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numbers
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 around 7 %. Meanwhile, Alberta and British Columbia just counted under 6% and the rest 3 provinces
was
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 the least about 3 %.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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