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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is freedom of speech. Now people are beginning to realize that it is essential in society and plays an enormous role in our life.

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One of the widely considered problems nowadays is that some administrations do not permit society to freely speak.
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,
freedom
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 of
speech
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 is the lifeblood of democracy. Now people are beginning to realize that a
country
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 could begin to deteriorate without the
freedom
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 of
speech
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.
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, the public can commence strike action against the government. Privately, I tend to think
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 the right way to make the government allow
freedom
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 of
speech
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. So that will be discussed in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, it
is well know
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 that free
speech
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 is necessary to maintain a stable government and living people in the
country
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. I mean absolutely anyone can express their points of view whether he is 2 years old kid or 60 years old man. It gives people the courage to communicate to make decisions and work on that.
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 Politicians: speak in public places to make commitments and plans for how to develop the
country
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. The audience listens to their words carefully, analyzes the words, and gives approval in the shape of the vote to win, so the audience encourages the politician can get a chance to work on his promises and commitments.
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,
freedom
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 is the fragrance of a gorgeous society. It makes you an extrovert and nourishes you to achieve a defined goal.
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this
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 privilege is merely limited to politicians these days. Those who are not politicians and if they speak something true about someone, they can be assassinated or murdered, if the opponent party is stronger than them. In that case, we become slaves in our own
country
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.
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, I believe that citizens should have
freedom
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 of
speech
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 in
favor
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 or against anyone. Facing difficulties
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 keeping quiet can lead to big disasters and troubles.
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 of giving up the complications we need to unite and work together
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Expand on your main points with more specific examples and detailed reasoning. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to another. Use more cohesive devices like transition words and phrases to improve the fluidity of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify and elaborate on your stance in the conclusion to leave a stronger impression on the reader.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic of freedom of speech and discusses its importance in society.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly related to the topic.
task achievement
The writer's viewpoint is clearly stated, and there is a logical progression of ideas.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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