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The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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The first chart illustrates the average
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years
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 of schooling, the second one gives information about the number of scientists and technicians per 1000 people and
third
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 chart reveals data about spending on
research
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 and
development
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, all between developing and industrialised
countries
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 in 1980 and 1990.
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, industrial
countries
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 had the most average
schools
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school
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years
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, number of scientists and technicians and
research
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 and
development
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 in
the
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both
years
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.
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, all three categories increased from 1980 to 1990, except the case of spending on
research
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 and
development
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 in
developind
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developing
countries
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, which
was
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gradually decreased from 1980 to 1990. The average rate of schooling
was
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dramatically rose from 1980 to 1990 for developing
countries
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 from just over 2
years
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 to a little less than 4
years
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 in 1990
resectively
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respectively
. The
years
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 of education
was
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 significantly more in industrialised
countries
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 with approximately 8
years
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 in
first
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the first
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 reported year to more than 10
years
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 in 1990.
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 trend was followed in the number of scientists and technicians with almost 10000 in developing
countries
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 and arond180000 for industrialised ones in 1980 to almost 20000 and 700000in 1990 respectively. The expenditure on
research
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 and
development
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 in industrial
countries
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 was about 170 billion dollars in 1980, which
shrply
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sharply
increas
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increase
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 to more than 300 billion dollars in 1990,
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this
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 trend for developing
countries
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 followed
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend with almost 50 billion dollars in 1980 to less than half in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, research, development, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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