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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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In the
last
decade
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 the population growing.
However
, the production of
food
 should be increased by turning to GM crops.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 method.
To begin
 with, in some developing countries they need for genetic approach to supplying
food
.In
others
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 workers, feeding all citizens
are
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 difficult
due to
 the increase
on
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 population and reduced
of
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agricultural land and the only solution is using the genetic approach.
For instance
, a survey done in 2023 at Sultan Qaboos University showed
80
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% of
people
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futur
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future
 nutrients will depend on MG.
This methods
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 will be responsible
of
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 feeding the next generation.
Therefore
, it seems logical that MG important source
for
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food
 and the benefits
of
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it is high.
On the other hand
, the drawbacks of
this
 approach
is
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 significant because modifying foods will lead to
change
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a change
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 in
the
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 nutritional value.
For example
,not only modifying fruits or vegetables genetically by adding
chemicals
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 material would help in dabbling the fruit size but
also
 it will change their flavours and reduce
the
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 nutritional value.
However
, people nowadays in developing nations are suffering from illnesses
such
 as
blood
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high blood
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 pressure and diabetes
due to
 the lack of vitamins and proteins in their meals.
Thus
, the drawbacks of
this
 method
are seems
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 significant and dangerous. In conclusion,
although
 there are some benefits of using MG
such
 as giving individuals their needs
of
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food
, there are some negatives
likewise
 the
food
's value
decline
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declines
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because of the lack
on
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 vitamins and proteins which
lead
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leads
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 to some diseases
such
high
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as high
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 blood pressure and diabetes
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