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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest?

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The production of
cars
 is rapidly rising in the world market as everyone prefers to travel at their convenience which leads to noise and air pollution.
However
, I think it can be tackled easily by putting effort into public transport.
To begin
 with, the main cause of traffic jam in developed cities are poor public transportation
facilities
. When crowds find the
transit
 running late, damaged and unwashed, they will start moving towards buying their personal car.
For example
, a recent survey of Japanese surveyors stated the poor
transit
facilities
 of the country which led to an increase in the ratio of motor by 70%.
Moreover
, nowadays more and more crowd prefer to travel at their own convenience as they don't get local buses on time and
therefore
, they
get
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arrive
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 late for their jobs. The solution to
this
 problem is improving the
facilities
 of public
transit
.
Firstly
, increasing the cleaning staff in conveyance will help to increase the number of passengers travelling and decrease the number of
cars
 on the road.
For example
, in ,Dubai society
prefer
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prefers
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 to use more public
transit
 than using their personal
cars
 as the buses are gleaming.
Secondly
, the government needs penalties on drivers to improve the punctuality of the conveyance space.
For instance
, the Driver gets a penalty of a nominal charge for every delay of a minute. The only solution for increasing
cars
 is to maintain and time public
facilities
. In my opinion, people prefer more clean and punctual
facilities
, if the government work on public conveyance and makes it good people adapt it easily.
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Task Response
Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces the topic and your opinion. Maintain a clear and consistent focus on the topic to address the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas coherently with clear topic sentences, supporting details, and logical progression of ideas. Use cohesive devices and transitional words to connect and link your ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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