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Band 5.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary work. you would like to do some voluntary or unpaid work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for the unpaid work. In your letter * explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum. * describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. * give details of when you would be available for work.

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Dear sir/madam I am writing with regard to how much I am interested in
work
Wrong verb form
working

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb work. Consider changing it.

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 at your museum and I don't ask
money
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for money

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 at all. I have to say that I study history at Oxford University, a job in the museum can have a great deal of use for me and my lessons,
besides
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 I love the design of your place,
Linking Words

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moreover
Add a comma
,moreover

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase moreover. Consider adding a comma.

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 my apartment is located near the museum so I do not
need
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toneed

It appears that the verb spend should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 spend a lot of time in the traffic jam to arrive there. I want to bring your attention to my abilities, First I am sociable and I can get along well with other people.
Second,
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I was a teacher in the elementary school two years ago
thus
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 when a school comes to visit the monument I can help a lot to
managing
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manage

The to-infinitive that follows the verb help requires the base form. Change managing to the base form.

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 children even I will give them information about our ancestors. Nowadays I am free on the weekends and Mondays and it is my pleasure to do something for
this
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 kind of institute and my city as a volunteer.
On the other
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hand
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,hand

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase On the other hand. Consider adding a comma.

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 I do my homework during the night If you want, I can fill the position of security after 6.00 pm, It means I look after of doors and study. I a
Wrong verb form
waiting
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Wrong verb form
waiting

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wait
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 your prompt response. yours faithfully. Saed Tavazoie

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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