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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

#people #phones #texts #disadvatages
People
 are getting busier
day
 by
day
 and the idea of meeting
people
 just to communicate some thoughts
,
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 seems an extra effort,
hence
 texting comes as an easy way out.
However
, it affects
the
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social skills and
this
 does take away the pleasure involved in meeting
people
 and talking.
While
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but
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it is good to keep up a balance between both. Today messages are the most commonly used method to interact with other
people
. It has taken up different forms,
such
 as email, informal texting, short message service, multi-media messages etc.
Firstly
, it is a quick and easy way to talk, it saves time
as well as
 money which can be invested in other tasks,
for instance
, if a professor is on leave, a small text informing a bunch of students in a WhatsApp group is the most efficient method to adopt.
Secondly
, texting not only saves you from formal and awkward situations but helps you get throw
it
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 smoothly. An employee,
for example
, will always prefer emailing the manager his resignation rather than talking to him directly.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of texting can not be ignored. Texting takes away the ability for humans to interact on
day to
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day
 basis and it becomes harder to talk directly.
As a result
,
people
 are getting apart from their own relations and find it hard to tackle the problems.
Nevertheless
, talking is considered a way to link with other
people
 and bond with them, which helps in making friends and networking with more
people
. In conclusion, mobiles have changed the idea of communication by making it more efficient via texting.
Although
 texting is highly adopted
but
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talking is essential too and I believe that taking both techniques together is the best approach.
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