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Some people think the government should provide free housing, while others believe it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some people believe the government should give the public a free apartment
on the other hand
 one group of people say
this
 occasion is not the responsibility of the government. In today's world, we see that the state does not provide people with free housing. some public want to live in a free house as normal because the population do not want to think about where they will live
However
 the authority should have a huge budget for the house which is difficult . the state is not budgeted enough even for education or health which are more important a result these communities are right but economic problems do not allow it my opinion support other group because education and health problems are more important than living house. if we can figure out
this
 problem economic ones may decrease and living areas will be able to problem taking everything into consideration, government responsibilities and priorities are different.
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task response
Improve task achievement by addressing both views with balanced argumentation. Present a clear opinion in the introduction and support it throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Work on logical structure by organizing the essay into clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use transition words to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand your lexical resource by using a wider range of vocabulary. Consider using synonyms and more varied language to express ideas.
grammatical range
Focus on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence variety.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic living standards
  • social equality
  • economic growth
  • disposable income
  • sustainable/sustainability
  • taxes
  • quality of housing
  • private sector
  • government intervention
  • innovation
  • efficiency
  • affordable housing
  • self-sufficiency
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