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Some people like to try new things for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep ding things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion

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Introduction
Change is the only constant in the world. I couldn'
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 agree more with
this
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 statement. To a large , extent
people
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 tend to prefer the same cuisines and similar
places
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 to travel ,
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 others, myself included, have different viewpoints as I like to explore unique
places
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,
food
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 and culture.
Body paragraph 1
It is safe to say eating familiar dishes and going to
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 you know about has its own perks.
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For example
 you don'
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 have to plan so much if you are visiting a place you already know about.
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, you know the expected flavour of the dishes you eat regularly. So you won'
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 regret what did I today, why did I choose that
food
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 item. It's a little comfortable zone that
people
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 like to live in.
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, your body gets used to these staple dishes &
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creates
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 fewer problems as you are not experimenting with your
food
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 choices.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, myself included
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 some
people
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 like a little bit of an element of surprise. Who tend to live a spontaneous life. In my opinion, sometimes
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 get bored eating the same cuisine over a long period of time. Going to the same
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 doesn'
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 have much to offer other than what you already know about the place.
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, travelling to new
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,
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 would add a new perspective into one's life, as one will likely experience a new culture,
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, and language.
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, it helps to create immunity in
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 who prefer all kinds of
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 items as their bodies adapt easily and don'
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 resist much.
Conclusion
In a nutshell, we should not force
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 to choose one type of lifestyle over another.
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, they would certainly feel a sea of change in themselves when they try going to unfamiliar
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, as it would make them a little more mature and affectionate towards other cultures, and their
food
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 choices and in turn,
people
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 would be more respectable and friendly with each other.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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