People who damage public property, such as buildings or statues should be required to do community service (such as cleaning parks) as a punishment rather than other forms of punishment (such as paying a fine or going to prison). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that folks who bruise public assets like public libraries or monuments ought to be required to do community service,

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as social endeavour as a penalty rather than other forms of punishment like going to prison or paying a fine. In my opinion, I partially agree with the given statement, and I will elaborate on it in

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essay. On the one hand, in our society, there are many public properties that everyone can use easily,

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as public libraries, post offices and police offices.

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, some communities go to those facilities and damage them, so they must get punishment like social work because most individuals do that thing the

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, if a person who does damages a public building for the

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, will get a penalty but if the government send him to prison, it is too harsh for him because it is the

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he has done that. Actually, in South Korea, for that reason, they modify their law.

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, being required to do community service is good for some people.

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, some nations harm their country buildings often, so the government decide to do social work but it

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, they go to jail for months or years, and some folks get some fines.

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, some studies show that when individuals often damage public estates

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as public schools and public offices, they will do to same thing again in a few days.

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reason, we have to send them to prison or make them pay a fine. In conclusion, I partially agree with

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topic. If some communities damage public possession the

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, we can consider doing social work for them

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, do it more than once, we ought to send them to jail or make them pay a fine. Eventually, that will balance punishment for everyone.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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