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Some people believe students can study from home, while some argue that they have to perform at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The discussion
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 on
education
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. Some people feel that
education
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 should be accessible online,
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 others think that in order to receive advanced
education
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,
students
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 must physically attend educational institutions. In
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 essay, the author will explain why they disagree with the following beliefs and lay out their position. There are several advantages that might outweigh the stated claim. One of them is the
caliber
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 of the class; parents who send their kids to school can keep them apart from their personal computers or
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cell phones
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 to prevent them from losing focus during the lesson.
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, the study material will be simpler to remember.
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, there are lecturers and teachers at schools who intentionally draw the
students
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' attention.
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, in class,
students
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 aren't allowed to use technology to amuse themselves
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 the lesson is still going on;
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 will help them concentrate because punishments have a stronger impact than distant learning, which is learning without doing. The marking system is yet more defensive. Going to
schools
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 produces accurate and fair assessments, but in terms of admitting at home,
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 allows
students
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 chances to engage in unethical activities. Fake scores that do not accurately reflect their talent and intelligence will be the results, and
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 will spark heated debate between the pupils. Even if teachers or administrators are present, they are unable to clearly monitor the kids because webcams can be turned on or off, giving
students
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 access to online resources for cheating. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
education
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 should take place at the actual location of the class because it will improve security, help prevent device addiction, and allow for proper grading
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 understanding.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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