Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? what are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some people tend to live closer to their birthplace than
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distant unknown place. In my culture, for many generations,
this
is how people have lived. It is absolutely fine to live closer to your hometown for many reasons to avoid
homesick
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,
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enjoy the festivals, and take care of aging parents.
First,
settling far away from the birthplace is quite intimidating for many. A person who stays far away may
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to miss all the homely &
cultural
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and cultural
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vibes, food and sense of belonging.
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, at times he may feel homesick.
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, staying close to the place where a person has been brought
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its
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numerous advantages. They can participate in cultural programs, enjoy the local delicacies,
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with friends and relatives without giving a second thought.
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you can take care of your folks who are getting old by being closer to them
However
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on the other
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it has its own demerits.
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, there would be
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constant
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from all of your friends and family in your personal matters which can easily
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by staying far away. Recently, I come across a situation where a
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marriage almost
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to divorce since you'll be under greater influence from these relatives. On top of that, you won't be able to experience different
culture
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cultures
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, enjoy food and make some new friends. In conclusion, there are pros and cons of different
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. There are people, myself included, who prefer to settle
further
away from my native place as it makes them more mature,
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and independent
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and see things from a very different perspective.
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, I'd highly advise
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go be a wanderlust and get out of your comfort zone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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