Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people tend to live closer to their birthplace than

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distant unknown place. In my culture, for many generations,

this

is how people have lived. It is absolutely fine to live closer to your hometown for many reasons to avoid

homesick

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can

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enjoy the festivals, and take care of aging parents.

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settling far away from the birthplace is quite intimidating for many. A person who stays far away may

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to miss all the homely &

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vibes, food and sense of belonging.

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, at times he may feel homesick.

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, staying close to the place where a person has been brought

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numerous advantages. They can participate in cultural programs, enjoy the local delicacies,

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with friends and relatives without giving a second thought.

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you can take care of your folks who are getting old by being closer to them

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it has its own demerits.

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constant

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from all of your friends and family in your personal matters which can easily

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by staying far away. Recently, I come across a situation where a

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marriage almost

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to divorce since you'll be under greater influence from these relatives. On top of that, you won't be able to experience different

culture

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, enjoy food and make some new friends. In conclusion, there are pros and cons of different

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. There are people, myself included, who prefer to settle

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away from my native place as it makes them more mature,

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and see things from a very different perspective.

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go be a wanderlust and get out of your comfort zone.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Migration
Settlement
Hometown
Roots
Community
Emotional attachment
Sense of familiarity
Social network
Bond
Safety
Proximity
Support system
Heritage
Limited options
Risk aversion
Adaptability
Comfort zone
Unfamiliarity
Exploration
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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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