Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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is argue
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by some that developed
country
does not require any improvement in
economic
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the economic
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sector as their
societes
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societies
already feel
satisfy
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with their current condition. I personally stand
to
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this
notion since
mostly
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most
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people
from
this
country
have a stable life.
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essay will elaborate more about
this
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issues
on
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the following paragraph.
Rich
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The rich
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country
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countries
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typically
pay
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attention most
on
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some basic needs of
its
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dwellers
such
as salary, tax, education and health access in order to make sure all of the
citizen
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citizens
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have
same
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the same
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treatment.
This
is why their
citizent
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citizens
have a tendency to feel
satisfy
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as long as their basic needs
is
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provided by
government
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the government
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.
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example
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Swiss is categorized as
some
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of
happiest
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the happiest
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country
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countries
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in the world,
as
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a
result
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their dwellers even with regular
job
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living in
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a happy and healthy life.
Thus
, they do not ask for another new improvement related to
economic
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aspect.
Furthermore
, as they already
living
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in
such
a wealthy living condition,
people
from
this
country
put their sight more entertaining themselves.
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is mostly done
with
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spending their time on vacation, learning new things and
spend
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some time joining social
organization
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organizations
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such
as
involving
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in charity to support other
people
who struggle with economic matters.
For instance
,
people
in my village, receive
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a donation
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donation
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from one social organisation in Finland, which
focussed
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more on education
with
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providing learning
material
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materials
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, tools,
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and uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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and even
provide
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healthy food once
i
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a week.
To conclude
, as all the citizen has been living
in
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decent
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a decent
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life,
government
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the government
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from
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of
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rich
country
pay attention more
on
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to
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other aspects rather than
economic
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the economic
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aspect as their citizen mostly
engaged
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engage
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in social things to satisfy themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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