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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrated bar graph below demonstrates the number of
households
according
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 their annual
income
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015 in the US. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
income
 distribution among US
households
 displayed similar patterns in these three years, with more
households
 in both the highest and the
two
 lowest
income
 brackets than
two
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the two
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 middle brackets. In both 2007 and 2015, the largest category consisted of
households
 that earn at least $
100.000
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100,000
, reaching approximately thirty and
thirty four
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million
households
. The
two
 second-largest groups in
two
 thousand seven and 2015 were those earning less than $25.000 and between $25.000 and $49.999. They both reached somewhere about
twenty five
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 to
twenty eight
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million
households
.
However
,
two
 thousand eleven saw a different trend, as the
two
 highest brackets contained a
great
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greater
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 number of
households
 than the highest range. In
this
 year, about 28-30
million
households
 made either below $25.000 or $25.000-$49.999,
while
 roughly speaking
twenty seven
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twenty-seven
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million
households
 had a minimum
$
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of $
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100.000 as an
income
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, two, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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