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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain - why you would like the job •give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ •say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to respond to the article that I read in the Australian magazine, about looking after your six-year-old child.
To begin
 with, as far as the job is concerned, let me explain why I would like it.
First,
I have just arrived in Perth and looking to be
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an au-pair
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au-pair
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au pair
.
Moreover
, I looking for a place to live in reason of the fact that I know anybody in
this
 new city.
In addition
, I think to
be
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 the right candidate for
this
 job, on account of the fact that I have ten years of experience in childcare in my own country, leading to be
confident
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 with kids.
Furthermore
,
last
 year, I was
au-pair
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au pair
 in New Zealand, and the parents were really happy.
Last
 but not least, I would like to visit the city during my free time, and play
piano
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the piano
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. If you agree with that, I would like to teach your son how to play
piano
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 and visit places
such
 as the Zoo and the Aquatic park. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any
further
 information. Kind regards, Tony
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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