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The graph shoes the consumption of meats and fish in a European country in 1979 to 2004.

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The graph illustrates information about the consumption of
fish
 and several types of meat (in grams per person per
week
) in a European state in the
period
 from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, the most popular food at the beginning was beef and lamb but within the given time the preferences had changed to chicken. The least popular was
fish
 and the rate of consumption had not changed much from the start to the end of the
period
. People used to eat mostly beef in 1979 at over 200
gr
 per
week
 but after 1988 the rate had dropped down half as much at a little over 100
gr
 per
week
. In comparison, the rates of chicken had a stable increase by approximately 60 per cent in 1979 at just under 150
gr
 to 250
gr
 in 2004 respectively. Lamb had a magnificent decline by one-third during the given
period
 from 150
gr
 in 1979 to slightly over 50
gr
 in 2004. The least popular type of food was
fish
, and consumption was stable during the
period
 with a little decrease of twenty per cent. In 1979 people ate
fish
 a little above 50
gr
 per
week
then
 after twenty years the rate slightly decreased to under 50
gr
 and stayed at the same level until 2004.
Moreover
, eating
fish
 was four times less than chicken at the beginning of the
period
 at slightly over 50
gr
 compared to a little over 200
gr
, by 2004 it was already less than five times at 50
gr
 compared to over 250
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