The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The tables
reporting
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report
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some
informations
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about
London
and
Sydney
temperatures and hours of daylight
in
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at
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the same weekend
at
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in
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December 2018.
Which are the
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data
of
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from
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London
and
Sydney
have
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were
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taken in three days (28-30th December 2018). In the first table,
temperature
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the temperature
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was changeable with the lowest minimum
in
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at
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3
°C
and the maximum
temperature
in
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at
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31
°C
.
While the
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sunrise
was
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rose between 08.05 to 08.06,
then
sunset
in order to different
with
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by
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one
seconds
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second
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. For the second table,
temperature
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the temperature
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was changeable with the lowest minimum
in
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at
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17
°C
and the maximum
temperature
in
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at
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31
°C
.
While
the sunrise
was
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rose between 05.45 to 05.46m
then
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the
sunset
in order almost
same
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the same
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but
it's
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it was
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quite different with one second only. In conclusion,
two
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the two
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tables
was
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provide some information.
Firstly
,
Sydney
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Sydney's
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temperature
is
exteremely
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extremely
hot than
London
in significant.
Secondly
,
for
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the sunrise in
Sydney
appeared in
early
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the early
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morning than
London
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in London
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.
Lastly
for the
sunset
,
London
have
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sunset
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a sunset
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in
late
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the late
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afternoon than
Sydne
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Sydney
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which dawn in
evening
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the evening
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.
At
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the end, that
different
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caused
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is caused
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by astronomy
and
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geographic position, and seasonal
reason
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reasons
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in scientific issues.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperature, °c, sunset with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "informations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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