Nowadays congestion and Traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. Some people believe it is a good idea to construct wider roads to resolve this issue. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be the solution, in our opinion?

Nowadays, Road users have
an increase
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widely, and that causes a lot of issues for a lot of
people
, the highest percentage of the nation
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to expand the
roads
,
hence
, active more facilities, Personally, I agree with that, it is a brilliant plan to build more
roads
. I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin
with, Traffic jams
demonstrate
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a big problem in the world.
However
,
people
experince
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experience
a shortage
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transportation
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the transportation
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system and the
congestion
which the
roads
has, as long as human arrives
to
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their work very late, because the
the
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number of cars and motorcycle increased sharply.
Moreover
,
people
prefer to design new
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for that problem and construct
a large
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large roads
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roads
to reduce
that
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issues of
congestion
.
For example
, China is the second country that has
a fantastic
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a fantastic road
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roads
albeit has a high proportion of humans.
As a consequence
, in my opinion
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commonly
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the commonly
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cited solution
of
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reducing
the
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congestion
and traffic jams is to build Three
part
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of
roads
,
first
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one only for workers and students and the second one for
the
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tourists and
citizen
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while
the third road,
just
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for
traveling
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,
Furthermore
, that will assist many
people
to have
a
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full control on their
time
and other stuff like arrive to your work on
time
and our children will not be late on
the
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their schools.
For example
, in the UK
people
are organised and very
commited
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committed
on
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their
time
because
United
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Kingdom
have
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a large
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a large road
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roads
and underground highway.
To Conclude
, it is frequently said that most cities prefer to expand their
roads
and increase the number of
the
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highway tremendously, Because the
congestion
and the crowded
roads
goes
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up,
in
contrast
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people
lose their
time
, In my
opinion
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the government ought to invest
on
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circulation system, I strongly believe that
are
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suppoting
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supporting
my point of view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • traffic jams
  • urban sprawl
  • induced demand
  • public transportation
  • sustainable
  • urban planning
  • walkability
  • infrastructure
  • smart traffic management
  • ride-sharing
  • environmental impact
  • comprehensive strategies
  • carpooling
  • green solutions
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