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Nowadays congestion and Traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities. Some people believe it is a good idea to construct wider roads to resolve this issue. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be the solution, in our opinion?

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Nowadays, Road users have
an increase
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 widely, and that causes a lot of issues for a lot of
people
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, the highest percentage of the nation
prefer
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 to expand the
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,
hence
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, active more facilities, Personally, I agree with that, it is a brilliant plan to build more
roads
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. I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
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 a big problem in the world.
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,
people
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experince
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experience
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transportation
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 system and the
congestion
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 which the
roads
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 has, as long as human arrives
to
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 their work very late, because the
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number of cars and motorcycle increased sharply.
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,
people
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 prefer to design new
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 for that problem and construct
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large roads
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roads
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 to reduce
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 issues of
congestion
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.
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, China is the second country that has
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a fantastic road
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roads
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 albeit has a high proportion of humans.
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, in my opinion
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commonly
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the commonly
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 cited solution
of
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 reducing
the
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congestion
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 and traffic jams is to build Three
part
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 of
roads
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,
first
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 one only for workers and students and the second one for
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tourists and
citizen
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citizens
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while
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 the third road,
just
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 for
traveling
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,
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, that will assist many
people
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 to have
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full control on their
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 and other stuff like arrive to your work on
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 and our children will not be late on
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their schools.
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, in the UK
people
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 are organised and very
commited
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 because
United
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 Kingdom
have
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a large
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a large road
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roads
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 and underground highway.
To Conclude
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, it is frequently said that most cities prefer to expand their
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 and increase the number of
the
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highway tremendously, Because the
congestion
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 and the crowded
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goes
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 up,
in
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contrast
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people
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 lose their
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, In my
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 the government ought to invest
on
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 circulation system, I strongly believe that
are
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suppoting
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supporting
 my point of view.
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coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a weak logical structure, and the introduction and conclusion are insufficient.
task achievement
The essay lacks relevant specific examples and falls short in providing a complete response and clear comprehensive ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • traffic jams
  • urban sprawl
  • induced demand
  • public transportation
  • sustainable
  • urban planning
  • walkability
  • infrastructure
  • smart traffic management
  • ride-sharing
  • environmental impact
  • comprehensive strategies
  • carpooling
  • green solutions
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