Some people think that every nation should concentrate on agriculture to develop. Do you agree or disagree?

Many argue that
agriculture
should be the first priority of every developing
country
. I strongly disagree because
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not every
country
has the necessary
resources
to depend on their
agriculture
industry
.
Also
, in international relations between nations, some countries have to trade
agriculture
for other
products
and
therefore
, there must be other nations who supply those
products
to the world.
Firstly
, in reality, not every state is able to prepare hectares of land and practice
agriculture
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those lands. A
country
must have enough land, each with potential for growing plants.
Moreover
, tools and enough
water
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required for a
nation
to develop
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agriculture
industry
and indeed, there are a lot of states that are not developed in machinery or
furthermore
, have a
water
crisis.
For instance
, Iran's main
industry
was
agriculture
for centuries and
consequently
, they are now facing a shortage in
water
resources
and
therefore
, are trying to find other solutions.
Hence
, not every
country
is a suitable place to plant and grow your vegetables.
Secondly
, in order for the global market to work, there are some nations responsible for supplying other
products
such
as metal, stone or even weapons and technology. For a
nation
to fit well in today's global market, it needs to
stablish
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establish
itself as a main exporter or importer of a certain good.
Also
, because there are already giant exporters of
agriculture
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products
, like the United States of America, other countries need to either, produce better quality goods for lower prices or, try another market and indeed, the latter
choise
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choice
is the most logical choice for a developing
country
.
For instance
,
although
Chile has no land with the potential of growing plants, it has a variety of mines and
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fully
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opportunity.
Thus
, not every developing
nation
can compete with the main suppliers of agricultural goods in the world and so, every state must only take advantage of the
resources
they have.
To conclude
, some might recommend every
country
to focus only on their
agriculture
industry
but I personally believe it is a mistake. A lot of countries simply do not have the gift of vast lands and enough
water
to be able to depend on
agriculture
.
Also
, every
nation
has been given a lot of natural
resources
from which they can make money and develop as a
country
.
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