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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some infornation is too important or to valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

#people #information #research #business #world #infornation
Scientific
researches
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research
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 plays an important role in
development
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the development
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 of
country
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the country
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. Some
people
thinks
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 it is
contribution
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a contribution
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 towards society to share
information
 regarding
there
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their
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 selves but some
thinks
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 it can be too much involvement of self without any particular reason.
According to
 me, it is beneficial to share
data
 for
researches
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research
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 and academic use but it should not be too personal. In
this
 world, where
people
 do not like to share much
data
 are
also
 have their strong
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 regarding what they think. Fear of using
data
 in
wrong
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the wrong
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 way is constant.
Thats
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That
 why,
people
prefers
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prefer
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 not to give any
information
 to anyone. Before sharing
data
, there should
a
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be a
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written consent form with everything mentioned
such
 as, where is
data
 going to be used, which
people
 can have access to the
data
,
how
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and how
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 long
data
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the data
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 is going to be kept in research.
Moreover
, everything should be explained to the person before taking any
information
 from them who
are
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 not able to read and understand consent. As
,
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apply
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 there was a case in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 in earlier times when some of the researchers used
black
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the black
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 community for research
purpose
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purposes
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 by telling them
wrong
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about wrong
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 medical
condition
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conditions
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 and
gave
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giving
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 them
chapatties
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chapattis
 with some chemicals. On the other
hands
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hand
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, we should give
information
 to the
reseachers
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researchers
 as it can help our
country
 to achieve success in finding new treatments
to
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for
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 some disease conditions.
Also
, it will be easy for researchers to get
samples
 in
local
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the local
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 community and they do not have to spend much money to go to vast areas for it. Saving money on
samples
 can be beneficial as they could use
this
 money on other
resouces
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resources
.
Moreover
, finding
samples
 in
same
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the same
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 geographical area can help in saving time as well. In conclusion,
community
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the community
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 plays a vital role in
development
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the development
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 of
country
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the country
a country
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. So,
its
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it
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 is our responsibility to contribute towards our nation. We should give
information
 to participate in big research projects as it helps in
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the country
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country
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country's
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 growth. But, it should not be too personal
that
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and
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 can cause troubles in someone's life. Again, researchers
also
 need to keep
information
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the information
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 confidential to prevent their
samples
 from any
problem
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problems
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 and
inconvience
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inconvenience
.
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