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Nowadays many young people are going to other countries for their future. What are the reasons for it? How it will be in 30 years?

#people #countries #future #years
People
seen
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 to change in
other country
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another country
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, for new
opportunies
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opportunities
of
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for
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job
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jobs
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, others
for
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to
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 improve
skills
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 in the
lenguages
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languages
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 and others to get
better
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a better
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 quality of life in
safe
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, health and
financial
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However
 young
people
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 a
lot
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 challenges once they move to
other country
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another country
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, a
lot
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strees
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stress
 and barrier
with
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language
 are one of the big
problem
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to
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 them causing health problems. In my
opinion
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 over 30 years will be different and the young
people
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the
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 way to live close
of
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the
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lovers , the economic and
differents
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different
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goberment
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governments
 help to have a global and
stardard
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standard
economic
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 when
the
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people
no
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 need to find other
opportunies
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opportunities
 in
different
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a different
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place
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places
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • educational facilities
  • employment prospects
  • quality of life
  • political climates
  • cultural exposure
  • global networking
  • professional development
  • standard of living
  • healthcare system
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