The lower diagram depicts the various of stages in production of bricks, which are manufactured for the building industry.

The lower diagram depicts the various of stages in production of bricks, which are manufactured for the building industry.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The lower diagram depicts the various of stages in production of bricks, which are manufactured for the building industry.
The lower diagram depicts the various
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stages in
production
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the production
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of
bricks
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, which are manufactured for the building industry. The
bricks
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manufacturing is harmless for
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
because there are
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only natural components,
as
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clay
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, water, sand and
temperatue
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temperature
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of any
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chemical products. First of all, the
clay
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is mined by
digger
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in the pits. After that, the
clay
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is delivered to a Brick
manufacture
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, where it is carried on the roller conveyor through the metal grid. Following that, the sifted
clay
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is
then
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added to sand with water. These are
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moved to one of the types of moulds and a wire cutter, which are turned into
bricks
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. After the
bricks
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are formed, it is moved to
drying
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oven for 24-48 hours. Subsequent, dry
bricks
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are moved to the kiln with
moderate
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a moderate
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temperature from 200 to 980
degree
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degrees
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of
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Celsius,
then
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the
bricks
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are carried to the next kiln with
high
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a high
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temperature from 870 to 1300
degree
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degrees
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Celsius. After that, these are
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moved to the final cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. And
finaly
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finally
, the
bricks
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are ready
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packaging and transported by
lory
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to the customer.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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