Some people are concerned that children spend too much time on computers – playing games, chatting and watching videos. But all this time is actually good preparation for children, who will have to spend many hours working on computers throughout their education and working lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some

people

are concerned that

children

spend too much

time

on

computers

– playing games, chatting and watching videos. But all

this

time

is actually good preparation for

children

, who will have to spend many hours working on

computers

throughout their education and working lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

.

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People

have different views about whether or not

children

's

screen

time

should be reduced. Some say that it is harmful,

while

others think that it is a preparation for the future. I personally believe that

children

will inevitably spend much

time

using

computers

when they work or study, so we should allow them to keep doing

this

.

Firstly

, it is generally claimed that we are moving to a digital era where

people

will mostly use digital materials in their studies.

This

means (that)

children

will no longer use printed materials, and they should all be ready to read on the

screen

.

In addition

, I think (that) some activities that

children

do on

screen

now are relevant to

this

.

For example

, watching videos and chatting will be parts of the studying process as they discuss assignments together via chatting apps, or watch online lectures.

Therefore

,

children

should get used to these activities from an early age as part of their training to face higher education. Another thing to consider is that the trend in workplaces is

also

shifting and employees spend an enormous amount of

time

in front of their screens now.

This

is because of the working-from-anywhere system that allows

people

to still be productive when they are not in the office.

In other words

,

children

are likely to have high

screen

time

in the future anyway

due to

the demand to stay productive.

As a result

, I personally would argue that

this

screen

time

students are having now is a very good investment for their professional performance in the future. All in all, in my point of view, parents should allow their

children

to spend a lot of

time

on

computers

with the aim of giving them enough exposure to something that will be useful in their academic lives and

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. I tend to feel that the

time

spent on

computers

should be seen as something positive in

this

digital era.