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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture illustrates the information about the changes which were done by the Western
Park
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 Secondary
School
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 from 1950 to today.
Overall
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,
while
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 the playground remained unchanged as the
school
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 amenity over the entire span, the
car
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park
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,
sports
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field
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,
science
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block
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 and main building have been demolished as modern facilities. Another observed feature is that houses and farmland no longer existed after 1950.
To begin
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 with, in 1980, a
car
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park
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, a
sports
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field
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 and a
science
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block
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 were constructed by removing houses and farmland.
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, the main building had been built on the
school
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 premises as its modernised amenity. A new
science
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block
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 which is located near the main building has been constructed. A small
car
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park
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 has been constructed by removing houses in the Northwest corner of the given map.
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, as is seen on the map, the farmland which was located in the Southwest corner of the map had been replaced by a
sports
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field
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. Moving to the current situation of the
school
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, the
car
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park
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 has been expanded by reducing the size of the
sports
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field
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as well as
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 the playground.
Conversely
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, the dimensions of the
science
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block
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 and the main building remained unchanged.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, car, sports, field, science, block with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • conversion
  • development
  • replace
  • initially
  • originally
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • infrastructure
  • modify
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