The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the average
carbon
dioxide
( CO2)
emissions
per
person
in
United
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the United
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Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. It can clearly seen that, average
carbon
dioxide
( CO2)
emissions
per
person
in
the
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apply
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Portugal and Italia the most increase
commuters
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in commuters
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throught
Correct your spelling
throughout
through
the period shown.
Also
,
while
average
carbon
dioxide
( CO2)
emissions
per
person
in
the
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apply
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Portugal and
Italia
Correct your spelling
Italy
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increase gradually,
this
figure
of
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for
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Sweden
and
United
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the United
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Kingdom falls steadily. In 1967, average
carbon
dioxide
(CO2)
emissions
per
person
in
the
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apply
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Portugal started at 1,2 metric
tonnes
.
While
this
figures
of Italy started at 4,2 metric
tonnes
.
Then
both
figures
gradually increase to 2007.
This
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These
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figures
of
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for
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Portugal a
peak
at 5,5 metric
tonnes
and
this
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the
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figures
of
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for
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Italy a
peak
at 7,8 metric
tonnes
.
While
average
carbon
dioxide
( CO2)
emissions
per
person
in
the
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apply
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Portugal grew a
peak
at 5, 5 metric
tonnes
and
this
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the
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figures
of
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for
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Italy rose
a
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to a
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peak
at 7,8.
This
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The
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figures
of
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for
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United
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the United
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Kingdom
drops
Wrong verb form
dropped
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steadily, it started from 11 metric
tonnes
and
this
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these
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figures
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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to 8,3 metric
tonnes
in 2007. Average
carbon
dioxide
( CO2) emission per
person
in
the
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apply
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Sweden
started at 8,3 metric
tonnes
and
this
figures
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figure
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continued
sharply
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to sharply
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rise to 1977.
However
,
this
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the
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figures
of
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for
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Sweden
sharply
falls
Wrong verb form
fell
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from 1987 to 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, co, emissions, person, sweden, tonnes, figures, peak with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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