The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.

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, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the

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but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated. Prices for all

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metals dipped in June. In January the price of nickel was up

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dropped to negative

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in June, ending the year with a one

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increase in both November and December. Copper began the year with an increase of two

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and by May, the price was dropping (by slightly less than one per cent). It rose again, increasing by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with

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per cent and the price fell in June (a one

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decrease). The change, was negative until October/November when it began to rise.

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average monthly change
prices of metals
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fluctuation
increase
decrease
sharp rise
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stability
volatility
data points
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external factors
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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Today every large city facing traffic jam problem. what are the causes and how can it tackle

In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?