In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in countryside is decreasing Do you think this is a positive or negative issue?

Nowadays moving from rural
areas
to
cities
has become omnipresent almost everywhere.
As a result
,
less
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fewer
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people
live in
countryside
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the countryside
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. I consider
this
issue as a negative development and support my statement
further
.
To begin
with,
increasing
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the increasing
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rate of migration from rural area to
cities
bring many concerning issues
for example
, it can
imiplicitely
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immediately
increase
inflation
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rate
specially
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for organic products. To clarify, rural
people
mainly take the responsibility of agriculture products and
row
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raw
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materials as they work in orchards or rice fields. When they leave their
habitant
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habitat
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and look for better job opportunities there, they are less likely to produce the same amounts of products
as a result
, these materials can be sold
in
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higher
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a higher
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price
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prices
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in
country
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the country
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.
Furthermore
, because there are limited apartments and housing
areas
available in
cities
,
owner
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the owner
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usually
increase
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their rental price to control the demand side.
Subsequently
, the
overall
rental and housing
price
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prices
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will
also
increase
.
This
also
can make
cities
over-populated
subsequently
capital
cities
will expand unpredictably.To clarify,
cities
don
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do
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not bear excess cars or residential
areas
resulted
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from
migration
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the migration
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of rural
people
and planners have to
increase
cities
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cities'
city's
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capacity. More shopping
center
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centers
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,
hospital
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hospitals
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and recreational
areas
are required to be constructed to meet
ever-increasing
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needs of city residents.
Besides
, as more
people
migrate to capital
cities
, there is often a shortage of available housing units.
This
high demand can lead to skyrocketing rents and property prices, making housing unaffordable for many residents, especially low-income individuals and families.
Moreover
, the cost of living in capital
cities
is higher than
rural
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areas
.
This
includes not only housing costs but
also
expanses
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expenses
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such
as groceries.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic opportunities
  • career prospects
  • quality of life
  • cultural exchange
  • economic stagnation
  • urban overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • natural habitats
  • migration
  • superior education and healthcare services
  • diverse and vibrant cultural landscape
  • local services
  • urban slums
  • pressure on infrastructure
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