the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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From the above chart, we can see the trend in the percentage of the British population, from the age range of eighteen to over sixty-five
years
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, who gave charity between 1990 and 2010.  In 1990 the number of British people aged eighteen to twenty-five
years
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more than doubled in portion, from up to fifteen per cent to slightly more than five per cent, compared to 2010. The same tendency is seen in the two following age groups, between the ages of twenty-six to thirty-five
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and thirty-six to fifty
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,
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, the decrease is drastically less. In both age groups, the reduction in percentage is merely a bit more than five per cent,
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, in the same ranges of ages, the
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amount of public doing charity in 2010 is still higher than the younger group.  Over fifty
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old
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tendency is inverse. In 2010 around four percent more people between the ages of fifty-one and sixty-five are granting money to the needy ones.  In the same way, the British over sixty-five
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are more likely to concede charity in 2010 rather than in 1990,
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the variation is meagre.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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