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The line graph demonstrates the amount of money that the U.S government spent on research from 1980 to 2008.

#line #amount #money #government #research
The line graph provides information about the amount of money that the US government spent on research
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Health
,
Space
, Energy, General
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Science
Scinece
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science
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) between 1980 and 2008 Overview, the US government
spented
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spent
spend
 on research
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trend
, two
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upward
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 and one
field
 stabilized.
Space
 and Energy, there gradually grew.
Space
 stabilized from 1984 to 1992 and after
that
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 it steadily increased between 1992 and 2008
in
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 about 9
billions
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. Energy
also
 stabilized from 1980 to 1992 and it climbed between 2004 to 2008
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 about 6
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although
 it slightly fluctuated.
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,
Health
 and other has
downward
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trend
, these two
field
 grew from 1984 to 2004.
Health
 started
increase
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 from 1980 to 2004
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 7
billions
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 to 21
billions
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 almost to reach a peak
although
fluctuate
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 but slightly decreased to 18
billions
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 in 2008.
Other start
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 6
billions
 after that it decreased to 5
billions
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 and stabilized to 1988. After
that
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 it slightly increased and
droped
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dropped
 in 2008
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 5
billions
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billion
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.General Science,
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started
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 under five
billions
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 and fluctuated to 2000 after
stabilized
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 from 2000 to 2008.The
field
 with the biggest change was
health
 with
fluctuated
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 and downward
trend
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field
 was the most upward
trend
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Space
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significantly grew
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