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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise.

#internet #matter #hand #people #socialise
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Everybody knows that the
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 is so common nowadays.
Due to
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 the fact that we live in a technology
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. A
lot
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 of people want to opt to
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 it to contact others.
However
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, others believe that it isolates humans. In my opinion, it is the best way to communicate with everyone. In
this
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 essay, I will explain some reasons. On the one hand, how
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 connect people? most of us
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 it to keep in touch with relatives who live in another country.
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Due to
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 the fact that it lets us
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 vıdeo calls.
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, it is free, we do not need to pay money for telephone, letter or fax.
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, my sister has lived in Germany for 20 years. She could not call us a
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 in the beginning because the telephone was so expensive at that
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.
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, she can call us every day even on video calls. Because she uses the
internet
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. İt shows us how it makes us connected to others.
On the other hand
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, how
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 isolate the community? A
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 of children and adults
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 it for games, especially kids. The games may be dangerous for kids,
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 the fact that some kids spend too much
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 a day, which makes them isolated from street games and their friends.
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, my friend's son was addicted to a game and ın that we dıdnt see him. The example shows us the
internet
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 is isolating people and is not good every
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according to
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 it.
To sum up
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, to
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 everything is like medicine , if you get enough dose it makes you healthy
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 if you get too much it makes you worse or dead. In my opinion, the
internet
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 is very useful and it has a
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 of benefits if we know how to
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 it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous communication
  • vast distances
  • maintaining relationships
  • professional connections
  • face-to-face meetings
  • in-person communication skills
  • local friendships
  • social isolation
  • community events
  • niche interests
  • like-minded people
  • virtual relationships
  • emotional connection
  • feelings of loneliness
  • superficial friendships
  • overly reliant
  • real-world relationships
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