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Grand parents are often taking care of the grand children, what are the advantages and disadvantages of it.

#parents #care #children
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Grandparentsparents in fact are a blessing from God ,
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that is
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 most of the
time
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 has beneficial effects
besides
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 a few disadvantages .In
this
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 ,essay I will discuss both sides. In the beginning
grand
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apply
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parents
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consider
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 the source of the pace ,
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 , many young
parents
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 prefer to keep their
children
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 with them to get high
caring
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,
for example
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, every child likes to go to their
grandparents
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' house, and they enjoy the
time
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 with them,
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, the
grandparents
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parents
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 have fulfilling of love they will care more about
children
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 that their
parents
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 work and don't have
time
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 to sit with them . On the other way there dark side of
grandparents
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 caring for
children
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 , one of these , is that old people can not going behind the kid's action ,
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, some of the
children
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is
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 very stubborn they could face challenges with controlling ,
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, caring centres are very expensive and spend a lot of money so the best way to keep the kids safe is for their
grandparents
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 . In conclusion,
grandparents
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 are usually a good place for all to spend
time
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 full of love and a nice
time
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 to learn from their experiences.
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