Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why it happened? Solutions?

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Re-offending crimes is a persistent
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issues
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in society, with
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who
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priviously
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previously
committed any
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often returning to criminal behaviour after serving their first
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incarceration
. There is a plethora of reasons for prisoners to recommit
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there are some measurements that solve
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for
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scenario. To commence with, There are
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numerous reasons to
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re-offend
the
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after serving
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punishment. First and foremost is
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inadequate
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whilst in prison.
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,offenders are not given a chance to retrain and learn new skills
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what right and wrong thing to do and their
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consequences
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they mix with other prisoners which will increase their criminal intention.
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, most offenders face difficulty in finding employment after being released. Most of the time they
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don't
find any job to survive and
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fulfil
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they go back to
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to survive.
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, peer pressure and
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environment
is
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significant reason as society
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avoid
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any kind of
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relationship
with criminals eventually offender return to
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as they feel society will not accept them because of their previous crimes but there are some possible solutions to curb
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problem. To tackle
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issue there are certain
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.
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with, the government can launch
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programm
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programs
for
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offenders
while
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they are in prison.
Rehabilitation
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programm adress
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programs address
psychological behaviour and some other
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causes
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of
crime
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and teach them about its terrible results.
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, authorities can offer some employment support .
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, if the government provide more options for
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the job
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to criminal to survive and
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fulfil
their basic needs
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they are less likely to commit any
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again. To
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recapitulate
, many
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prisoners
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are most likely to commit
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crime
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crimes
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again after being released. there are reasons behind
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recommitting
committing
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as unemployment and lack of
rehabilitation
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however
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we can
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address
this
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issue
by giving employment support and by providing
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education
and
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awareness
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the law
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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