The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
The maps show the developments in a bookstore in 2000 and now.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals
a changes
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changes
a change
show examples
in
this
library. In 2000, the library was empty and had no
different
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apply
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interesting rooms, but during the next 24
years
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years,
show examples
the library experienced a number of changes. The most noticeable is that
fiction
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the fiction
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room
on top of travel was divided into 4 sections.
Also
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Also,
show examples
the fiction
room
to the right of the cookery was changed to
non-fiction
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a non-fiction
show examples
room
.
Moreover
, 3 sections of the central
of
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apply
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building
was
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were
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replaced
to
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with
show examples
the
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apply
show examples
three new tables, where students can work and read
book
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books
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in
facility
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the facility
a facility
show examples
.
Furthermore
, the non-fiction
room
was replaced
to
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by
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the cafe.
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