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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
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The table reveals estimated expenditure for the following five
years
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. In American
dollars
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,
for
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apply
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three sustainability initiatives for forestry The pie chart represents
predicted
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 budget breakdown for the first
year
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 as the projects are established. From
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overall
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 perspective, the data indicates project costings, particularly concentrated in Southeast Asia, and distribution of expenditures in
year
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 one, demonstrating salaries, training, and other expenses. In the first
year
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, Southeast Asia is going to take up 30
million
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,
following
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 by Central America
20
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million
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, and West Africa with 10.5
million
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. Over the next four
years
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, the expected costings vary differently.
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, Southeast Asia presents a noticeable increase, reaching a peak of 50
million
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dollars
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 in
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last
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years
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 of four and five.
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, West Africa shows
remarkable
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 decline after the first
year
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, being stable to 2.5
million
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dollars
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 in
years
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 three and four, slightly recovering to 3.5
million
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dollars
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 in
year
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 five. Central America shows steady progress, remaining 5
million
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dollars
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 from
year
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 three onwards. As can be seen from the pie chart, salary takes up exactly half of the budget.
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, training makes up 30%, and setup and office expenses both
accounting
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 for 10%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, dollars, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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