The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

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a bookstore between 2000 and now. In general, a comparison of the 2 maps reveals a change from

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to a library with a reading area. In 2000, the bookstore had

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so many genres, but without

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area.

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center

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cookery, hobbies and arts.

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year the fiction make way to cookery, hobbies and arts.

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the center has

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table

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to read.

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, in the corner of a

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the fiction

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non-fiction.

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, the non-fiction in 2000, turns to a cafe near

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the table. Despite these changes, the Travel, New Books, and Service Desk sections have remained unchanged in their original positions near the entrance.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

124 words

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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

Some people believe that it is good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valued to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Personal experiences in community service and/or involvement

Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are the causes? What are the effects on society?

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by thr government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? give reasons for your answer and relevant examples.