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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
#maps #show #bookstore
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illustrates
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a
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the
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 development of the bookstore
for
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over
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 the past 23 years.
Overall
, there have been dramatic changes between 2000 and 2023. The most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 difference is
reconstruction
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a reconstruction
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 of
"
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the "fiction"
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fiction
" area on
upside
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the upside
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 of
map
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the map
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 and
dividing
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the division of
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 it into new 4
section
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sections
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: art, hobbies, cookery and
fiction
.
Furthermore
,
configuration
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the configuration
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 of
bookshop
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the bookshop
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 experienced changes
also
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in
middle
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the middle
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 part. Art, hobbies and cookery genres, which were located in
centre
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the centre
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 of book steller in 2000, now moved to
fiction
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the fiction
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 part and replaced with
setting
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a setting
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 area for customers with 3 large tables and surrounding chairs.
Also
,
fiction
 books, which were on
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the leftside
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leftside
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left side
 of
store
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the store
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 in past,
now
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are now
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 replaced by
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
 genre.
The
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Last
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last
 but not least
development
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the development
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 of
book
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the
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 store is
building
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the building
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 of
new
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a new
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 cafe for clients. The new cafe
located
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is located
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on
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in
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previous
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the previous
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 location of
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
 area. The unchanged areas are travel and new books with
service
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the service
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 desk.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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