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Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the development of globalization, more and more global organisations engage in offering help to developing countries. Some people argue relief should be financial.
However
, I think practical aid and advice are more helpful because they are the foundation of civilization.
To begin
 with, monetary aid can benefit developing areas from several aspects, like basic infrastructure.
For example
, countries with financial problems need public facilities at the most to ensure the daily activities of citizens, like road construction, and running of schools and governments which are essential to crowds. By receiving funds from charities, the authority could continue governing the country and organize different official departments to assist citizens.
Otherwise
, without ruling, turbulences might be ignited because of dissatisfaction from citizens that hazard society.
On the other hand
, despite the advantages of financial support, I believe it can not eliminate the root of problems, like poverty.
For instance
,
although
 a country
that is
 poor because of corruption receives economic help, it is still hard to get rid of poverty.
In contrast
, global assistance that aims at improving its political frame might be more considerable. It is more beneficial to cooperate and tutor locals in aspects of growing rather than barely dumping money.
In other words
, solely financial support might lead to an opposite direction that diverges from its original idea.
Overall
,
although
 financial aid can bring some profits to the local economy, I believe it is more helpful to teach locals practical skills and advice to ensure long-lasting economic growth.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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