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The diagram below show the stages in the production of bricks.

The diagram below show the stages in the production of bricks.
The display diagram
show
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 the stages in the production of
bricks
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. The below information
describe
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describes
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 the
process
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 in detail. There are around 7 stages for the production of
bricks
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. The clay is degger,
then
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 it is
metal
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a metal
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 grid in the roller after which sand
as well as
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 water is mixed
then
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 wire cutter,
bricks
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 and mould. The mould
in
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is
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drying
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dried
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 in
oven
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the oven
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 for 24-48 hours, kiln is moderate for 200
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degree
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degrees
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 to 980
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degree
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degrees
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,
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then
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and then
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kiln
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the kiln
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 is even high 870
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degree
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degrees
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 to 1300
degree
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this
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process
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take
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takes
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 more time than other.
Cooling
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The cooling
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 chamber is 48-72 hours.
Then
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 it is been
pack
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a pack
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 and it goes to delivery. There is
long
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a long
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process
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 from digger and clay to delivery to the hall
saler
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sales
, retail, shop
kepper
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keeper
keepers
,
super market
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supermarket
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, malls,
to
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apply
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godowns, and many more. It is even
export
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exported
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 to the other nation.
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, the above information describes the
process
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 for
production
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the production
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 of
bricks
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, process, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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