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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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Nowadays, technology has been facilitating our daily lives over the years.
This
 has contributed to the fact that
people
 in shops prefer to make their payments with
credit
card
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cards
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 or by phone
instead
 of
cash
.
This
 essay will outline how likely it is that
people
 in the future will purchase things only using technological methods and if a part of the population
would
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will
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 be unsatisfied with
this
 change.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
 think that buying things in a market with
credit
 cards o phones is easier than paying with
cash
,
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 because they do not need to waste their time going to the bank to withdraw
cash
.
Moreover
, with the increasing number of online shops, individuals are obligated to pay through bank transfer, because most of them want to be sure before sending their products.
On the other hand
, a small part of the population, especially older
people
, prefer to pay with
cash
, because they do not know a lot of technology and they feel afraid of being scammed. As recently happened in Ecuador, where several media news have been reporting about
people
 who suffered fraud for paying with
credit
 cards.
In addition
, individuals disagree with the extra charge that banks make to their
account
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accounts
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. In conclusion, it can be argued that nowadays the trend is to use
credit
 cards or bank
transfer
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transfers
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 to pay.
However
, the Government should teach methods to do safe transactions, in order to promote technologies in our society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital payments
  • convenient
  • efficiency
  • reduce crime
  • tangibility
  • privacy
  • limited access to technology
  • job losses
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