The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. 

 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.
Given are two figures concerning the major sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and a decade afterwards. A glance at the pie charts provided reveals that oil was the most major part of the sources of energy
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the negligible part
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to hydroelectric power in the all surveyed years. The highest amount of the sources was taken up by oil
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for 42
percent
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and 33
percent
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of the whole pie chart in 1980 and 1990 respectively. The second highest rate of energy generation in America was related to natural gas
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for all but 51
percent
collectively in
1980s
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the 1980s
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and a decade afterwards. 1980, nuclear power and hydroelectric power took up
similar
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proportion of 5
percent
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of the whole pie chart and they were the least significant proportion. The prior witnessed an exponential increment and stood at 10% in 1990. Meanwhile, the latter remained still in 1990.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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