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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#technologies #lives #consumers
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We are using technology today for everything from looking something up to ordering food. I agree with that opinion. You can buy anything online, even illegal
things
. On some websites, they personalize everything for every single person. Some
people
don’t
 have
time
 to go to town to buy something nice for themselves. You can buy anything with technology. There are so many different
things
 on the internet that we can buy. From what we need to cook to what our children need as a birthday present, some
people
 even sell illegal
things
 on the internet that can’t be tracked back anymore. Many police officers are trying to track down who is selling that, but it is not often that they find the person. On websites, they personalize everything for every single person. Many websites have the fetcher to see your cookies, so they can see what you are interested in. So they
are seeing
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 what you
were
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are
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 searching for, and they personalize the website, so there are more interesting
things
 for you to buy. Some
people
don’t
 have
time
 to go to town to buy something nice for themselves. Some
people
 are working full
time
, and they are coming back really late. They
don’t
 have the
time
 to go out to buy something. They use the internet most of the
time
 to order food or clothes. To come to an end you can buy anything with technology and you get a personalized website. Some
people
don’t
 have
time
 to go shopping so they order
things
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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