The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The given statement shows alternative ownership of electrical
appliances
and amount
of time Correct article usage
the amount
spend
doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Change the form of the verb
spent
As
an Change preposition
From
overall
view
it can be seen that Add a comma
,view
percentage
of households with electrical Correct article usage
the percentage
appliances
using
between the years Wrong verb form
used
of
1920 to 2019.
Change preposition
apply
Washing
Add an article
The washing
machine
was highly Using
in 1920 No one used Wrong verb form
Used
refrigerator
.All the electrical Correct article usage
a refrigerator
appliances
were Using same
Change the article
the same
percentage
in 1940.But the
Change preposition
in the
year
of
1960refrigerator were Change preposition
apply
using
so huge Wrong verb form
used
at
the same Change preposition
in
year
washing machine
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
machines
cleaner
used 70 Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
percentage
.In the Replace the word
per cent
begging
of 2000 vacuum Correct your spelling
beginning
cleaner
and Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
used 100 Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
percentage in
other hand washing Correct your spelling
percent, while
machine
only used 70 Fix the agreement mistake
machines
percentage
.Replace the word
per cent
at
the end of Capitalize word
At
the
2019 both Change the article
apply
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
used
fully but washing Add a missing verb
were used
machine
used Fix the agreement mistake
machines
73
Rephrase
only 73
percentage
only.
households with electrical appliances
worked 50 hours per week in 1920.year
by Capitalize word
Year
year
electrical appliances
usage would be reduced. Fix the agreement mistake
appliance
At the end
of year
10 hours per week Add a comma
,year
only
used in 2019.Add a missing verb
were only
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, percentage, machine, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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