The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The given statement shows alternative ownership of electrical
appliances
and
amount
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the amount
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of time
spend
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spent
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doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
As
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From
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an
overall
view
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,view
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it can be seen that
percentage
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the percentage
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of households with electrical
appliances
using
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used
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between the years
of
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apply
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1920 to 2019.
Washing
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The washing
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machine
was highly
Using
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Used
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in 1920 No one used
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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.All the electrical
appliances
were Using
same
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the same
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percentage
in 1940.But
the
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in the
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year
of
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apply
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1960refrigerator were
using
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used
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so huge
at
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in
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the same
year
washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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used 70
percentage
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per cent
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.In the
begging
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beginning
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of 2000 vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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used 100
percentage in
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percent, while
other hand washing
machine
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machines
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only used 70
percentage
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per cent
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.
at
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At
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the end of
the
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apply
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2019 both
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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used
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were used
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fully but washing
machine
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machines
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used
73
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only 73
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percentage
only. households with electrical
appliances
worked 50 hours per week in 1920.
year
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Year
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by
year
electrical
appliances
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appliance
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usage would be reduced.
At the end
of
year
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,year
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10 hours per week
only
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were only
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used in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, percentage, machine, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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