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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
Gone are the days when
people
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 used to spend all their lives in the same city and the tour was a word for rich
people
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 only. Now, with
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technological advancements, cheaper
flight
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flights
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, and
ever increasing
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 awareness towards other states and countries, the world has become a smaller place. Having travelled since childhood, I can definitely say that the
tourism
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 industry is changing fast and
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 is attracting a lot more travellers each year.
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 essay delves into the reasons behind
increasing
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the increasing
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travellers
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number of travellers
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 and
benefits
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the benefits
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 of travelling.
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,
people
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 want to get refreshed quite often
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 their increasing workload and they have easy access to information they want. These are the two main reasons
people
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travel
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 more frequently than ever before. It is evident that busier workdays and
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 hectic lifestyle can easily drain one out.
People
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 have started to work more and earn more as compared to earlier days.
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, with the wave of information that the internet has brought, everyone is better informed about the world outside their office or home. These things have acted as precursors to the increase in the number of
people
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 who opt
travelling
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to travel
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 as a holiday
get away
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getaway
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.
Second,
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tourism
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 is taken very seriously in several countries now. Countries like Australia and France have
travel
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 &
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tourism
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and tourism
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 as an important part of their economy.
Tourism
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 contributes to around 30% of the national GDP
for
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 Dubai.
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,
people
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 have started picking up careers in the realm of
tourism
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,
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travel
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 bloggers, trip organisers, etc. I myself have met
people
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 who
travel
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 for a living and love doing so. These factors have
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 led to accrual in the travelling population. I believe travelling exposes us to different
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 and their traditions, outside or even within a country. India itself is a collection of myriad customs, flavours and languages. Visiting places one has never been to and meeting
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 with different beliefs
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 our perspectives. Introduction to different cultures catalyses respect towards
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mutual differences. It helps us understand
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 in a new light, which can be very helpful
to alleviate
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 tensions during political or cultural conflicts. In a nutshell, I would say that travelling is equivalent to education. It can bring
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 closer to each other despite their differences, which is very important in today’s global world.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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