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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Humans have benefited greatly from
science
. Some would say that its most crucial aim is to improve people's
lives
 but others would think
otherwise
. In
this
 essay. I will be discussing why I believe
betterment
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 of human
lives
 by
the
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art is very important but should not be its only purpose. The impact of the discipline in healthcare has helped to make it effective. The invention of high-grade machines
such
 as MRI, CT scans and X-rays
have
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 increased precision in
diagnosis
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 of various health conditions and in turn, better treatment for these ailments.
In addition
, the development of drugs, which is a function of
science
,
have
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also
 been used in
treatment
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 of various diseases. These would prolong man's lifespan and even improve their quality of life.
It is clear that
 its role in people's
lives
 can not be overemphasized.
Furthermore
, household chores have been made efficient through the help of technique. The use of household devices,
for example
, washing machines, dishwashers, vacuums and lots more has helped to hasten chores and
hence
 create time for other productive
endeavors
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. It is obvious that life could be made easy with the involvement of
science
.
On the other hand
,
science
 has been found to be useful in research.
For instance
, fossils dated as far back as millions of years ago have been discovered and have been used in studying the history of man and animals. It has
also
 provided opportunities for space and its bodies to be studied. Many other aspects of life and their origin have been made known through the help of the arts In conclusion, the impact of
science
 on man is great but enhancing their
lives
 is as important as the role it plays in other aspects.
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