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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph represents the percentage of households with access to internet usage in
Germany
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, the UK and
Spain
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 from 2007 to 2019.
Overall
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, it is clear from the bar chart that it had a gradual improvement every two years. The usage of the Internet by households in
Spain
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 was comparatively smaller than the other two countries
whereas
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Germany
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 has a quite larger percentage. The survey that took place in 2007 clearly illustrates the 10% difference in each
country
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 approximately.
Moreover
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, the
country
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 United Kindom started to rise in the year 2011 and had very good access to the internet throughout the upcoming years. In the final survey which was conducted in 2019, the
country
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 United Kingdom approximately matches
Germany
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. When it comes to the
country
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 of
Spain
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, it was very low in usage but eventually had a step-by-step growth from 2007 to 2017. There was a shocking result for
Spain
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 in 2019 where it almost matched the growth of the United Kingdom and
Germany
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.
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 that had been taken in 2019, the
country
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Germany
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 had a leading percentage of 95%, the United Kingdom ranged between 92% to 95% and ,
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finally
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Spain
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 touched the value of 90%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, spain, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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