The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The above bar chart describes

that

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the people( women, men) who have taken their driving licence in an Asian country

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the

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between 1980 to 2010 ( in 10

years

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gap

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gape

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) In the beginning, the

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number of womens

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womens

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women's

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passed

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their driving test

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extremely high in

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the year and

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their percentage lies between 40 to 70

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overall

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, the vast number of women who passed their driving

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licence

license

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is in the year 2000 and followed by

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cent is slightly

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, compared to

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women

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mens

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are less likely to get

driving

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a driving

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licence at the same time period. In the year 1980 , the passed rate was around 20 to 30

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cent.

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it slightly increased in the next 10

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cen increased above 30 , Fllowed

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this

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next 20

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the same and it did not touch

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cent.

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2Word repetition
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23Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

159 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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Percentage
Pass rate
Driving test
Trend
Increase
Decrease
Milestone
Comparison
Significant difference
Broad social changes
Policy changes
Surpass
Reflect
Implications
Disparity
Overall trends
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