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The pie charts show the destination of export goods in three countries in 2010.

The pie charts show the destination of export goods in three countries in 2010.
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The presented pie charts illustrate the proportion of
destiened
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destined
 continents exported
goods
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 in
Argentina
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,
Mexico
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 and
Chile
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, a majority of
export
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exports
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of
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from
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Mexico
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 went to
USA
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the USA
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while
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Argentina
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 and
Chile
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 sent their
goods
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 to
other
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Latin America more than other continents.
According to
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 the pie charts,
Argentina
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 and
Chile
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 had
a
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the
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 same pattern in exporting
goods
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 in 2010. In
Argentina
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 16% of
goods
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sent
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were sent
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 to
USA
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the USA
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 which was 2% less than
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Chile
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in Chile
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while
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 62% of
Mexico
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 exported
goods
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 sent to
this
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 continent. Just more than a quarter of exported in
Argentina
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 were sent to Europe
while
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 38% of them exported to other Latin America.
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, in
Chile
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, quite the same proportion of exports
sent
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was sent
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 to Europe and Latin America for 30 and 31 percent respectively. About a fifth of these
contries
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contry's
contries'
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 exports
sent
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were sent
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 to other
continets
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continents
while
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Mexico
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 exported 6% of its
goods
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 to each sector.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, argentina, mexico, chile with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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