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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number pf these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention #pf
Space
 exploration
undoubtedly
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 high priced, and vital
issues
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issue
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 on
Earth
 that
demand
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 attention. In
this
 essay, I will argue that
while
 problems on
Earth
 should not be ignored,
space
 missions should not be reduced,
due to
 their advantage in
term
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 of scientific discovery, and environmental monitoring.
Firstly
,
space
mission
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missions
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 output valuable scientific discoveries,
extend
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and extend
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out
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our
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 understanding of the universe.
For instance
,
mission
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 to Mars have provided insights into planetary evolution which have implications for the
Earth
's future. The knowledge gained from
such
 missions can be applied to addressing land-based challenges.
Moreover
,
space
-based technologies
ply
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play
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 a significant role in monitoring and mitigating environmental issues on
Earth
. Satellites provide critical data for tracking climate change, predicting natural disasters, and monitoring deforestation.
Space
 assets are indispensable for addressing crucial environmental challenges. 
To conclude
,
while
Earth
's problems are urgent and critical, reducing
space
 missions would be shortsighted. The benefits of
space
 exploration, including scientific discovery and environmental monitoring are too valuable to sacrifice. A balanced approach that allocates resources to both
space
 exploration
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and
Earth
's challenges is essential for a brighter future for our planet.
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